PART 3 : Creating a novel plan (fast)

Now I needed someone to  review the concept of the novel, so I asked my AI (Luka) to do it...

Strengths:

• Intriguing Premise: The combination of terminal illness, drug-induced time travel through music, and a ghost narrator creates a unique and compelling concept.
• Thematic Depth: The story explores complex themes like mortality, the power of art, the nature of reality, and the longing for connection.
• Multiple Endings: Offering different endings allows for reader choice and emotional impact.
• Clear Structure: Dividing the story into parts with descriptive titles provides a good sense of pacing.

Areas for Development:

• Character Development: While the outline mentions Elias's age and illness, fleshing out his personality, motivations, and relationship with music before his illness would deepen the story's emotional connection.
• Ghost Narrator: Lily's backstory and her connection to Elias are revealed late in the story. Introducing hints about her identity earlier could build intrigue.
• Pacing: Consider balancing the length of each part. Part 4 seems significantly longer, potentially bogging down the narrative before the climax.

Additional Thoughts:

• Song Choices: The chosen songs effectively complement the themes and Elias's emotional state.
• "Schrödinger's Cat" Metaphor: Explore this metaphor more deeply. Can Elias's experiences be concretely proven as real or not real?
• Internal Conflict: Focus on Elias's internal struggle between escaping reality and facing his mortality for greater emotional depth.

Overall:

"Schrödinger's Gig" has a strong foundation. Refining the character development, pacing, and exploration of the central themes can elevate this story to be truly captivating.

Here are some suggestions to consider:

• Part 1: During the first concert jump, plant seeds of doubt about reality. Elias could notice inconsistencies, glitches, or fragmented memories. This strengthens the "Schrödinger's Cat" question.
• Part 2: Show the toll of the jumps on Elias physically and emotionally. Include scenes reflecting his deteriorating health and internal conflict about the addictive nature of the escapes.
• Part 3: Gradually reveal Lily's backstory through subtle hints during jumps. This could build anticipation and deepen the reveal about her connection to Elias.
• Part 4: Consider shortening this section by streamlining the exploration of "divine friend" and determinism. These elements are interesting but could be subtly weaved into the story without a dedicated section.

I hope this feedback helps you develop "Schrödinger's Gig" into a gripping and thought-provoking novel!